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Hi PubTips! I got a lot of great feedback last time, so I’m posting a second attempt to see if there’s anything else I might be missing or could polish. I did decide to keep my video game credits in as-is, as I think it does offer a fuller picture of who I am as a writer and researcher. I may end up…

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The website is all about “empowering” and “nurturing” authors, which raises red flags for me: [Seventh Agency](https://www.seventhagency.co.uk/about) There seems to be only one agent. He’s made two deals according to Publisher’s Marketplace. Is this just a new agency, or does it seem suss to anyone…

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I am seeking representation for my Contemporary Lesbian Romance novel, THERE’S ALWAYS SOMETHING EVERYWHERE, complete at approximately 80,000 words. Cass has always been her own worst enemy: sharp-witted, self-sabotaging, and never satisfied with life. In her late twenties, she parties hard, wakes …

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Hi everyone. Any comments much appreciated on my query letter. It’s multi POV and I am UK based. This is my first novel. Thank you so much. Dear \[personalise agent,\] I am seeking representation for my 106,000-word adult epic fantasy novel, HALF-FAE, with series potential. It combines the gritty,…

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Hello! This is my first query posted here but not the first I send out. Context: I graduated from an MA in Creative Writing (UK) last year, queried about 30 agents over 6 months and got nowhere. I went back to my tutor who helped me revise my opening chapter and referred me to a commissioning editor…

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Hi! Today I received a query rejection that seems dangerously close to an R&R. Personalized feedback naming two issues with the sample pages and an explicit invitation to resubmit should I choose to fix those issues. The original query was a pitch contest submission so the agent read I think thr…

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Hi all, I’d appreciate any help with my query! I’ve included the first 300 as well. \— Dear \[**AGENT**\], Twenty-four-year-old Eden Jones knows the new AI dating app Spark is predatory bullshit. But when she drunkenly downloads it after a night out, she’s shocked to find that her AI-generated…

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Very grateful for any feedback. Totally redid it compared to the last one, in an effort to focus even more on the main character. I’m sorry if the formatting is off, as its posted on mobile. I’ll fix it if that’s the case once I have a computer available! Dear X, I am seeking representation for …

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Second and final attempt for now before I dive back into the first draft to start tearing it apart 🙂 Any and all feedback welcome, particularly cohesiveness, comp suggestions, and opinions on current 3-character query vs focusing on just 1? [Attempt 1](https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1p2…

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Hi guys, I’ve posted my query letter to this subreddit a couple of times and haven’t received any glowing reviews or anything. In fact, my query seems downright bad given the comments I’ve received. And I don’t expect to be an expert at it given how new I am to that style of writing. But I’ve also s…

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I’ve been sending my first book out to literary agents for the past few months now. Through Query Tracker, I’ve been sending it to literally every agent that fits the genre of my story, which totaled to about 50 or so; half of them have already rejected it. Where should I go in the event that none …

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\*Deep breath\* Hello everyone! 🙂 I’m back in the querying trenches for the third time, but I’ve never done a query critique on here before. I’d love some feedback, since I’ve been staring at this for 7 days straight, haha. Thanks for this opportunity! EDIT – Ignore the “east meets west” reference…

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Hi all! Would love to get some thoughts on this query letter–thanks! Dear \[agent\], Everyone in America is watching Starmaker. It’s a reality television show unlike any other—a competition hailed as a groundbreaking fusion of American Idol and Big Brother. Twenty young men enter, and only five w…

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hi! i’m looking to start sending my manuscripts to agents in the first part of next year. i wanted to go ahead and work on my query so i can have everything polished ahead of time. would love any insights! Dear \[Agent\], I am excited to share EZRA KING IS OVER PARTY, an adult contemporary rom-…

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Dear Agent, THE ALLOTMENT is an 82,000-word double POV contemporary romance that combines the grumpy-sunshine energy of Lucy Parker’s Battle Royal with the chaotically British enemies-to-lovers romance of Beth O’Leary’s The Wake-up Call. I am querying you because xxx. 28-year old Maeve Morton face…

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Obviously most agencies don’t want you querying multiple agents there at the same time. But for agencies that allow querying another agent there after one passes – is there a point to doing so? I imagine they can your query history with the agency. So, do you have a lower chance with the subsequent …

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Please help. I hate everything about this. In a world where memories can be bought and sold, a struggling young writer begins purchasing the life experiences of a dying novelist–only to inherit a devastating secret. My debut novel, MEMORY MARKET, is upmarket speculative fiction complete at ~70k w…

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Fifth and hopefully final attempt following the advice I received on my previous posts ([1](https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1ogylhp/qcrit_adult_cozy_romance_before_the_snow_melts/), [2](https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1oh7p7k/qcrit_adult_contemporary_romance_before_the_snow/), [3…

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Hi everyone! I’m looking for some feedback on my very first query letter. I’d appreciate any help, guidance, or criticism you can offer – especially suggestions for comp titles. \_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_\_ Dear \[Agent\…

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Dear Agent Name – As a child, Liz Armstrong survived the London Blitz. Now grown and living in the United States, she has sworn that her own daughter will always remain ‘safe’. Her twelve-year-old daughter, Carrie, strives to forge a connection with her distant, perfectionist mother, hoping to one …

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[PubQ] I got a lit agent at a legit agency. They reached out to me, for context. This fall I sent in my full book proposal, and things seem to be unenthusiastic. My agent just responds every now and then with a short message like “Got it!” Most emails go unanswered. I send updated drafts of my book…

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Heelo there, this is my first query attempt for my literary work. Dear \[Agent\], I am seeking representation for *The Quiet House*, a 78,000-word literary fiction novel about a middle-aged woman who abducts a toddler and raises him as her own – a life of profound devotion built on a despicab…

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Hi all! I’ve swung for the fences on this third iteration and would love your thoughts on marketability and coherence. \— NEURAL BLEEDTHROUGH (74,000 words) is a speculative thriller with a sapphic romance subplot and series potential, reframing the kinetic action and hopelessly lesbian leads of…

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Hi All, I’d be really grateful if you could please provide feedback on my query letter. Many thanks for reading! *The Last Harvest* is a literary fiction, dual POV novel of around 96000 words, set in Romania, in 1949, during the communist era. Lucretia Salomei has four children and is married to la…

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Hi! I’m thinking of submitting my work to agents and would love some critique on my query before doing so. I have a list of comps (which I’ll paste after). Let me know if any in my list fit better, or if you have any suggestions 🙂 Dear \[agent\], BLOODSTONE is a 119,000-word contemporary fant…

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Just wondering from the agented authors in the room, especially those in literary fiction, how long would revision cycles usually be with your agents? I signed with an agent at a reputable agency back in June and after some initial feedback, I got him the revisions in early August. His plan was to …

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Hello pubtips! Long time lurker. Grateful for the feedback and community. Query: TRACES is an adult upmarket speculative contemporary novel for those of us who wonder how the characters of turbo-charged coming-of-age stories handle their turning thirty crises. Complete at 80,000 words, it features …

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Dear Agent, Lucy Moffatt can’t move, can’t speak, hell—she can’t even *blink*. Everyone believes she’s been left in a coma after a tragic “accident”. But Lucy has locked-in syndrome. Fully conscious inside a paralysed body, she hears every word her husband and medical team say. The police investig…

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Hey all, this is my first book with the second underway, I was looking online about reaching out to literary agents and this wonderful sub reddit appeared. So I thought I’d reach out and see what you all think of my pitch, what it needs and how it could be improved. Thank you in advance for any help…

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Hello all. This is my first attempt at a query letter. I have spent a lot of time procrastinating about it. All up it’s \~270 words. Just seeking advice and critiques. Be honest, I can take it. Original title was THE LAST HERO, but I’m considering changing it to the one listed in the query. \-…