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Hello! Long time lurker, first time poster. I got in agent in May (wahoo) for my debut novel and I’m now on my second round of revisions. It’s….very challenging. I feel like the agent’s feedback broke all the chains of cause and effect, and now I can’t figure out what any character wants or why an…

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Hi everyone, I’ve sent this query out to around 20 literary agents – got no bites. Prior to querying, it went through many revisions. I also had it critiqued by readers and a traditionally published author. I’d like to check again though to make sure I’m going in strong on my next round of querying…

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Hi everyone! I’m super nervous to be posting here, in all honesty T-T. I love this story, and after my last novel died in the trenches, I’m seeking all the (kind) feedback I can get. I recently worked with an agented author on revising this, so I’m (for the most part???) confident in at least the co…

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With the advice from my [first](https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1ogylhp/qcrit_adult_cozy_romance_before_the_snow_melts/), [second](https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1oh7p7k/qcrit_adult_contemporary_romance_before_the_snow/), and [third](https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1on…

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I’m having major trouble getting to a clear, concise query that hooks the reader… I posted it on other forums for critique, but anytime I talk about her body stuff, people assume I’m talking in vague metaphors when I’m actually talking literally, or their mind jumps to some frankeinstein type of s…

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Hi all, Looking for some feedback on this please. Have submitted to around 25 agents, but no bites yet :/ – I’m writing to submit my 84000 word novel Long Shadows for your consideration. Long Shadows is a coming-of-age literary novel, which deals with the rise of far-right politics amongst disen…

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Hello everyone….I’ve had a few agents in the past and thousands of query rejections in the 15 years of this journey (agents submitted to big 5, close but no cigar, few indie deals with publishers that went down, 16 completed projects with many getting query rejections) but I am getting back on my …

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Hey everyone. MONTHS after my first attempt, and a fair bit of manuscript revision later, coming back with a second go around. Thanks to everyone for their help the first time. I am feeling really good about my manuscript but I must have written twenty versions of this query letter in the last mont…

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Hi everyone, Here’s the link to the first attempt: [\#1](https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1onkxde/qcrit_streets_and_stones_adult_sf_sf_thriller/) It lacked some clarity, so I did my best to explain things as much as possible. Compared to #1, it’s a bit on the chunky side. I still need to…

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Hi everyone! I’m looking for your thoughts on whether this query works or not. The story itself is fairly low-stakes, and I think that gets reflected in the query as a sort of dwindling down into generalities instead of specifics as it goes on (bad, I know!), but I’m wondering if it works despite …

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Hi all, first time posting a query here for critique – currently in the query trenches and would love some insight regarding how this comes across. I do worry that the word count might be high (this is already cut down from 130k), and I’m not sure how strongly the plot itself comes across here. Will…

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Dear Agent, We are seeking representation for our mystery, (Title), our debut novel at 61,130-words. In 1976, Bill Jackson and three other men had been out drinking, deciding to take the back road home. As Bill navigated the sharp bend, he never saw her, hitting and killing a young wife and mother…

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Still workshopping a concise query hook and keeping it under 200 words. Thank you in advance for any thoughts or feedback! \~\~\~\~\~\~\~\~\~\~\~\~\~\~ Callan Grey sought refuge in the goblin city of Raythasa—not to fall for Princess Teeka, the queen’s overlooked daughter. Their connection is inst…

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Thank you for good feedback! I decided to try a more personal approach when it came to the main character, as I felt like the other query became a bit too focused on the plot points. Any feedback appreciated, as it still feels wordy and long. Dear X, I am seeking representation for FIMBULVINT…

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Hi all, this is the most recent draft of my query. Dear agent, I am thrilled to talk to you about THE LAWLESS (103,000 words), a science fiction novel. Think BOOK OF THE NEW SUN blended with African spice and spun like a BLOOD MERIDIAN-esque fever dream. Menander might be a liar. He might be a …

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Hey! New here, and new to reddit in general so not quite sure how this all works. I started my querying journey 3 weeks ago- have had 1 full request and 18 form rejections and not really sure where to go from here. Have had feedback in agent 1-2-1s that my query needed work, so I’ve tweaked it, but…

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It’s been a long while since my last revision, and I’ve completely rewritten it. Here, I tried having one tight middle paragraph, since the detailed versions got too confusing. Dear \[Agent’s Name\], I am seeking representation for *In the Valley* (75,000 words), a YA sci-fi mystery that echoes …

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As the title states, as a big fan of Romantasy in general, I’ve noticed that a majority of popular books these days have often been much longer than I’m told is an acceptable word count (Which I’ve always read, for adult fantasy, was in the 100k-120k range) and I’m wondering if anyone has been query…

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I’m in the query trenches listening to crickets and staring at my three rejections. Yes, my first batch was only 12 queries but they’re all between 2-3 months of at this point and I was hoping to at least get one bite. I worked on my query with a writer friend after the last time I posted here but I…

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Thanks in advance for your feedback! Dear \[Agent\], I am seeking representation for my debut literary novel BOY (WC: 75,0000), a tender coming-of-age about an eighteen-year-old whose affair with an older woman results in life-altering consequences. BOY is for readers who enjoyed the character ind…

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Dear **\[Agent’s Name\]**, In Cathartia, prophecy isn’t divine revelation – it’s civil service. The Ministry of Prophetic Affairs oversees the process with all the warmth and efficiency of a tax audit. But when the king falls ill and his son, Prince Owyn, assumes control, he decides prophecies need…

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\[Agent name\], Thank you for your encouragement in #DVPit this past October. I was so excited to see you liked my pitch and I’m even more glad to present to you my debut novel MOONMARROW. A sapphic sci-fi horror complete at 50,000 words, MOONMARROW is told through journal entries and audio transcr…

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First Attempt I’ve been fine-tuning this letter for a while now. I am a little conflicted about how many ‘spoilers’ to put in the query letter. For some background – this is a dual POV novel. Monica tells her story traditionally, while the second narrator is referred to only as “Her”, and she tells…

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Hello everyone, this is my second time posting my query letter and rewriting it is driving me to the point of insanity. Please help! Here is my query letter, as it stands: ‘Dear, Audrey, a young writer in fake fur and fishnets, occupies a place between exhilaration and panic. Fare-dodging the Tu…

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Hi, everyone While I wait on partials and fulls for my latest MS, I decided to work on something else and ended up with this project. I tried posting here a couple of weeks about the genre, but it got taken down. I was told I had to attach my question to a query, so here it is: I was talking to a …

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Hi everyone, finally back to give this another go. The tone is wildly different from the first attempt but I believe it’s more focused, as always appreciate any feedback, thank you! \*\*\* Dear \_\_\_\_\_, Glaswegian criminology student Rianne Jackson never considered herself a mean girl, but the…

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I’ve reworked the query to approach it from a more character-driven perspective. I’m honestly not sure which version I like better. This query feels less high-concept to me than the first attempt, but I do like that you get to know Renly a little more in this one. I’d love feedback on which version …

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Hey again! I’m back with the second attempt for my query after implementing some of the feedback I received on my first post. Please let me know how this one reads and what criticisms you may have. Anything and everything is appreciated. Thank you all! Dear \*\*\*, Dr. Harrison Balaam made a dea…

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Hello PubTips! I’m about to start querying in earnest, so I’m hoping you all can help me improve my pitch before I really start. Last time I posted this, you all gave me some really good advice, which I used to make this variant: \[Personalization\]. I am excited to share SAINTFIRE, an adult dark…

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Hello all, First off, thank you to all who helped out on my first attempt from a couple of weeks back, especially u/Imaginary-Exit-2825 and u/WaryCleverGood. Very much appreciated and much-needed feedback! Hopefully, you see your inputs directly addressed in my second at-bat here. **Please note…

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So I swallowed my fear and recently queried an agent I’ve admired for a while. They responded and wrote a nice rejection letter, then gave me the opportunity to submit my work to a ‘second chance’ box. Wondering if anyone else has submitted their work to a second chance box or had luck this way? W…

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I started querying a few months ago for the first time. Ive learned a lot about this process and have come to the conclusion that my MS was simply not ready. I think by January I may be ready to start querying a different project. Do I need to withdraw all hanging queries before I do that? Also can …

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I imagine some people would respond to this question with something akin to “when it’s at the point where you are willing to spend money on a professional,” but the truth is that I’ve been paying for my beta reading too. And so, I’m not really sure where to draw the line. What kind of responses do…

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Hi all, Just seeking advice, I’ve been writing for years and am on my 5th novel, have done multiple courses and I’m slowly getting recognition in competitions for my latest novel this year. This novel got 2 full MS requests and I sent both my book. 1- from a brand new agent 2 months ago, nudged he…

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Hello! I’m looking for some feedback on my query letter. I sent out a few queries to see if I could get some traction, and the only personalized rejection I got said that the stakes weren’t clear enough/high enough for her liking. Although she passed it off as a subjective reason, I do think she’s r…

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Hello everyone. This is my second attempt (I deleted the first go from a good while ago as I didn’t understand queries and it’s best forgotten.) I really appreciate any advice on this. Dear \[Agent\], \[personalised intro\] I hope you’ll be interested in my character driven YA fantasy adventu…

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Dear Agent, For three years, Ivy has wandered New York City with no memory of who she was before, carrying only a ruined wedding dress and a tattoo written in an unfamiliar tongue. When she follows a fox through the streets, she is dragged into Otherworld, a land shaped by old magic and older wound…

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Dear [agent name] I’m thrilled to send GOREMAGE: AWAKENING, a grim dark fantasy complete at 100,000 words, your way. GOREMAGE: AWAKENING is my debut novel. A pilot book with great series potential written in third person omniscient point of view, following an ensemble cast of societal outcasts st…

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**Attempt 2:** Dear Agent, Ari Aceria had her life shattered after the death of her sister. Since then, she’s desperately trying to maintain whatever is left of her family, while barely keeping herself from completely falling apart. However, even the city is looking to her for salvation as a new t…

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Hi everyone! Thank you so much for your help a few months ago, truly. This new version hopefully addresses the incredibly helpful comments I received. The current draft is 350 words (without the bio), and I’m aware this is pushing the upper limit. So I would be particularly grateful for your for fee…

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Hey everyone! I’ve been querying with this for a bit and not seeing much in the way of results (other than rejections). I feel like I’ve stared at it for too long, is there anything glaring that I’m missing? Is 58k too long for this genre? Don’t worry about my feelings, I’ll just cry to my husband…

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Hi everyone! I think I’ve reached a point in my manuscript where I might be getting ready for queries so here is an attempt at one. I think I’ve gotten a little bogged down and am at a point where I don’t really know where I have gone wrong anymore. Hopefully you guys can shed some light on all the …

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Hello again**.** After some additional market-leaning research, (hence the wordcount), as well as some revisions and a title change, I’m entering the query trenches again and would appreciate some eyes on this. Letter below: Dear \[Agent’s Name\], I am seeking representation for my 70,000 word ad…

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Dear agent, I am excited to introduce you to my novel Never Feel Alone, a closed-door contemporary romance of 70,000 words. The story features tropes of friends to lovers, workplace romance, and found family. It is an emotional romance with the feel of TV shows like This Is Us and Gilmore Girls. S…

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Hi Folks, I’m looking to find a Query critique equivalent to what the Query Shark had offered. I had worked with her in the past for a previous project and it was incredibly helpful. I’ve tried posting here but unfortunately MG queries just don’t get as much feedback. Which is fine! This group has …

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Idk why but the idea of getting THE CALL and them to be like oh yeah you queried me 76 times, good to finally meet you— haunts me. Should you bring it up on the call? I feel like I’ve never seen anyone talk about this but surely someone somewhere signed with an agent who passed on prior projects…

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Please, hive mind, tell me what you would do in the following circumstances. I sent out 45 queries with initial sample pages over the last two weeks of last month and finally finished a copy edit of the full manuscript on Saturday night. I sent it out to the couple of full requests I’d received so …

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I started querying about two months ago. I’ve noticed since then at least two agents have switched from accepting email queries only to accepting exclusively via QueryTracker. I noticed this because I was looking at agents’ QT timelines and I saw how everyone that has recently queried these agents (…

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Hi everyone! I am attending the Writing Away Refuge virtual pitch event this weekend (it is my first time ever directly pitching agents (other than cold queries) – so any and all advice is welcome!), and I have 2 manuscripts that are ready. MS 1 got 11 full requests in the trenches, one is still out…

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At 26, Krystal assumed she’d have her college degree in hand and at least some semblance of a dating life, but caretaking her disabled mother in a cramped Tallahassee trailer has derailed her plans. Desperate for a turnaround, Krystal volunteers as a beta tester for a mysterious tech startup. Using…

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Posting again because I was a little too far over 300 words on the first try, sorry! Hello, PubTips! It’s been a hot second. I’m back after ~~a year and a half~~ some time and a lot of Life That Happened with a manuscript I can’t stand the sight of any longer, which means my querying journey is off…

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Would love thoughts and feedback on the below! Dear \[Agent\] I’m seeking representation for *At-Will*, a 93,500-word (complete) work of literary fiction that explores corporate exploitation through dark comedy and moral ambiguity. Nathan, a British-American marketer, is laid off during the pa…

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Dear \[FirstName\] \[LastName\], Liz Armstrong survived London’s black canyons of bomb debris as a child, and has sworn that her own daughter will always remain ‘safe’. Her daughter, Carrie (12), strives to forge a connection with her distant, perfectionist mother, hoping to one day be ‘good enough…

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Hi everyone! The feedback I received on my last submission was very helpful and I hope I have done the necessary adjustments. As always any feedback is appreciated and thank you so much for your time reading this and replying. Dear agent, I’m seeking representation for my 85,000-word adult fanta…

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Hello all, this is my second posting of a version of this query letter. Since my last submission, I hired someone to review and revise this query and have since started submitting to agents. Unfortunately, my queries have either been rejected or ignored. It has only been a month, and I haven’t given…

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Apologies if I’m not doing this correctly – below is Query I’d like to get feedback on. \———————————– TITLE: The VEXX GENRE: Science Fiction+ AGE GROUP: 18+ WORD COUNT: 126k – not 75k my mistake. SUBREDDIT ATTEMPT #1 \———————————— Dear \[Agent’s…

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I’m in the middle of the third draft. I think I am ready to let go of the old approach. How does this work: Dear Bob, I am seeking representation for THE SCION, an 86,000-word YA urban fantasy with crossover and series potential that will appeal to readers who enjoy a dash of quantum magic in thei…

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Hi folks, this is my first time posting. I’d love any feedback, but especially areas where I can condense and cut down. I appreciate it! \– Dear \[Agent\], \[Personalization\] Count Cesare Salio hates Venice. He’s stayed away at university as long as possible, escaping the cruelty he faced as …

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Hi, I’m hoping to get some feedback for a memoir query. I’ve written it and rewritten it according to different opinions in the memoir space, but would appreciate any additional insight into what it might be lacking. Thanks! ( Also sorry mods, I forgot to include the genre in the title for the last …

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Dear XXXXX – Thanks for taking a moment to review my query. I see you have a focus on humor and adventure, both of which are features of my layered, genre-spanning debut novel, The Trouble with Tiki. 20-something main character Gilley Martin’s life realities – part-time tiki bartender and full-tim…

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Dear Agent, I’m seeking representation for my adult fiction novel FALSE MEMORIES. I read on your \[agency\] bio of your interest in \[something\] and thought it would be a good fit for your list. FALSE MEMORIES is a commercial novel with speculative elements, complete at 80,000 words. It will appe…

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Hello everyone! I’ve spent the past year writing my debut. In May I was shortlisted for a novel competition and my agent, who works at a big UK agency, asked to read my full manuscript after meeting me at the prize ceremony. We met and discussed the book in early July and she told me that, while t…

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By the time I read up on the agent and personalize my query, I can do maybe 2 or 3 a day. I use Manuscript Wishlist to find agents, by the way, in case that gives you a better of idea. Share your methods, please.

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I recently got an offer from an indie publisher, which I used as leverage to query agents. After nudging one of the agents I queried from Stonesong, I got a reply saying said agent left the company, but that the person replying to the email has reviewed my query and would like to offer representatio…

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So, my case is a little specific. While querying, I got an offer from an indie publisher, so I went ahead and nudged all the agents I had queried. I then got offer of rep from one agents. Do I now re-nudge all the agents to inform them? In other words, does the urgency of their response increase …

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Okay, so I wrote a story. I kind of like it and am thinking of querying it, but I have no idea what genre to frame it as, and without that, the querying won’t go anywhere. So basically, I started to write it as romance, but it didn’t end up being that. It does follow some romance tropes like HEA, bu…

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Hi I am Harsh Raikar and I have written my first book called Diary of a aspiring writer and It’s a book like which is full of jokes with relatable story.

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Hi all, Thank you for the [first round](https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1ohbv6y/qcrit_adult_contemporary_romance_how_to_share_a/) of feedback. I’m back with another draft. … Dear \[AGENT\], I’m seeking representation for HOW TO SHARE A BYLINE, a 70,000-word contemporary romance. Come…

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Please help me with my query letter. I am an absolute beginner to this, and after discovering this sub (and some very helpful tips) I’ve rewritten my query letter. I’ve already received some rejections, likely due to my previous draft, which was probably terrible. I know I’m not supposed to use a b…

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Thank you in advance for any advice or criticism. This is my first time posting here, and this sub has been ridiculously helpful. Cheers. \——– WINE MAGIC (THE VINOMANCER) query: Twenty-two-year-old Ynes Ianella has traded her family’s prestigious winemaking legacy for dulcimer strings and mu…

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Hi all, I want to say this query is close- hopefully you agree! Finally got the wordcount down and everything streamlined, so I’m feeling much more confident all around. Also especially curious about impressions of the bio. I have a much more cut and dry one, but was trying for something with a bit…

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Hello all, this is actually my second attempt at this, the first being about *four* years ago. I’d put this manuscript on ice, but I’ve recently revised and finished it. I’m not sure if I need to link the first attempt, but I can do so if need be. Thanks in advance. \——- Dear Agent, I recen…

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Hey all! I took in the feedback on the previous post which you can still see on my profile. I tightened and cut a ton, let me know what you think! Dear [Agent’s Name], Every memory she’d ever stolen, every fractured identity she’d erased, pressed upon her like suffocating earth atop a grave—yet in…

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Hi all, Thanks so much for the feedback on my [first attempt](https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1o5y2am/qcrit_ya_urban_fantasy_the_timepeacers_89kattempt/)! I ended up doing a near-total rewrite, this time focusing more on the main character. I’ve reread it so many times that the words have…

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First of all thanks to everyone who supported me on my first (SHOCKING) and second (a little better) attempt at a query. I think I’m closer to something decent. I can take harsh criticism. If you’re curious here are my [first](https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1odbhrq/comment/nksuwzy/) and […

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Dear Agent, I am seeking representation for CAN’T FALL, my 87,000 word pumpkin spicy adult romance novel, with interconnected series potential. Like THE PUMPKIN SPICE CAFE, it’s an ultimate fall read, with a small town that is a character within itself. It includes a charming man who falls hard for…

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Dear AGENT, Maebh wants nothing more than to hold her healer’s wand in her hand. Months away from completing her final tests, the distance between Maebh and some tiny, unnamed village in want of a few poultices and powders grows narrower, and she couldn’t be happier. As much as she loves the druid …

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Hi all, I signed with a pretty experienced agent in late February 2025 and am getting increasingly frustrated with how slowly things have been going. We went out on sub rather quickly (my agent didn’t feel much editing was needed) but my MS only went out to 6 editors. Three months went by and we’d …

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I was told to send out ten queries and if I don’t get any requests to rework everything by an agent I met at a conference for the last book I queried. (They were hosting a workshop on query strategies.) I trust her opinion. But, my pitch garnered a few agent likes on Bsky and X the other day for gh…

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Hi everyone! Oddly specific question, I know haha, but a small portion of my manuscript (about 3000 words) can stand alone as a short story and I was looking at submitting it to a few literary magazines. I have had short stories published before – love the medium and engaging with literary spaces….

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When would you begin to query? After you’ve taken the manuscript as far as you can without investing in additional editors and beta readers? Or is it worth it to invest the $$$$ in developmental and line editors first *before* querying your manuscript? I’d like to try the traditional publishing…

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I recently got a full request from a very new agent (an assistant), who I queried while their boss, who I wanted to query, was on maternity leave. They ended up passing on this manuscript and said nice things. While I still have this MS1 in the trenches with fulls still out, I’m 60k into writing my …

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Hello PubTips – thanks for your helpful feedback on my [first attempt](https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1ohvmxc/qcrit_ya_fantasy_ravel_92k_attempt_1/)! I believe I’ve solved most of the issues, but I wanted to post my revised query, as well as my first 300 words, to make sure I haven’t acci…

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Hi all! Appreciate any and all feedback, but some things I’m specifically struggling with/thinking about are: 1. Comp titles. This is always the hardest part for me when writing queries. I went pretty “literal” with two other regency era fantasies, but if any other titles come to mind as something …

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I am hoping to begin querying in the coming months. So while I finalize my draft, I wanted to get an idea on the premis of my query letter. I have two books written in last 5 years as my comp titles, but I left them out in case I decided to change them. *** I am submitting for your review an act…

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Hi everyone! Hoping for some critique before I apply to a mentorship program this month. Besides basic structure and level of interest, I have three more specific questions: 1. Can I comp a self-published author? My impression was no, but an agent on my list specifically asked for comps to Haley Ca…

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Hi Everyone! After a failed first attempt earlier this year, I took some time to rework my Query, so hopefully I’ve followed the Query rules well enough this time! Appreciate the feedback mods. I know MG queries don’t get commented on often but I’m hoping I get lucky and people feel generous! I’m al…

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Dear Agent, Based on your interest in \*personalization\*, I am excited to offer ENDLESS for your consideration. ENDLESS is an adult speculative romance combined with medical drama that is complete at 87,000 words. When Nora died giving birth to her son eighty-five years ago, she was brought back …

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hey everyone! i got some great feedback last time I posted here, but learned some important info that inspired me to shelf that story and focus in on the horror manuscript I’ve been working on. It’s finally coming to a point where I want to start putting together my query package, and I would love e…

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Hello all! I am here on behalf of my spouse to help out with her qcrit. She has gotten *a few* bites on this book, partials and pitch event interest, and completed an extensive revision to tighten prose, but I want to make sure the query is in excellent form. Thank you! \– QUEENS OF THE ANCI…

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Long-time lurker, first-time poster here. The current title is a placeholder. Thank you in advance for any feedback! \—- Dear {AGENT}, Quinn Marcus is Emma Lake. Or, rather, she was Emma Lake for the first 22 years of her life. Eight years ago, she shed her identity as the pill-addicted dau…

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Hi all, I’m back hoping for some more feedback, maybe from some fresh eyes! I queried many agents earlier this year but only got form rejections or no response at all, so I’m trying to revise my query and pages to try again soon. I know I’ve posted here a lot, and I truly appreciate every person who…

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I’m still a ways out from querying this but hoping to get some early feedback on the letter! Dear \[Agent\], I’m excited to submit for your consideration AS LIGHT FALLS*,* a multi-POV YA fantasy novel, with romance subplots, complete at 98,000 words. Angels rule the sky, saiths haunt the sea, a…

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Dear \[Agent\], Forced to leave her forest home, Treya makes a reluctant move to the frozen frontier city, a place where secrets fester and the snow hides more than blood. Her skills as a hunter draw the eye of Lord Amdan, the city’s immortal ruler, whose interest is as dangerous as it is magnetic….

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Hi all, hoping to make this my final attempt for feedback as I think I’m getting closer after some constructive comments the last times out. Any and all feedback welcome! Here are my first and second attempts, for those interested: First attempt: https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/s/7b5BnZWNGu Seco…

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Dear \[Agent’s Name\], I am seeking representation for my humorous picture book, THE DAY I ACCIDENTALLY INVADED EARTH (750 words), a fast-paced story for children ages 5–8. Q-Bop Quizmon (Bop for short) didn’t mean to cause trouble. But when a spilled cup of extra-slimy glonk shorts-out his ship’s…

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This is my first post here, and I am currently working on my very first attempt at querying agents. I would appreciate any and all feedback! Scarlet DuVeaux is haunted. Not only by the dark force stalking the witches of New Orleans, but so maddeningly by the glimpse of a mysterious face nestled a…

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Here’s my first attempt at a query letter for my novel, it’s too long but I’m currently working on editing it down but i wanted to start working on my query letter in the meantime. —— Elias De Leon is a Mechanist. Born to live Sky Side atop the gleaming towers of Neo Medina, blessed with longevit…

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Any help is appreciated! *The Realm of Beasts* is complete at 120,000 words and is an epic ecological fantasy that explores the devastating consequences of human greed and the innate desire for power. It combines the visceral grit of R.F. Kuang’s The Poppy War and the mythic scope of Samantha Shann…

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I would appreciate any and all feedback, this is my first time querying an agent and I’m a bit nervous. Dear \[agent\], I’m pleased to submit for your consideration my cozy fantasy novel with series potential, KIPPE THE WANDERER (81,000 words). Anji is a teenage elf with a simple dream: to beco…